五、范文详解
本文共三段十句,总分总结构。语法、拼写、标点正确,用词恰当,语言自然流畅,语法错误极少,词汇和语法结构丰富多变。有效使用了多种衔接手法,文字连贯,层次清晰;内容完整,论证充分。
首段图画描述共三句,总分结构。首句总体描述图画的三大要素:人物(前锋+守门员)、动作(射门+守门)、环境(足球场),使用了物称代词作形式主语、被动语态、主语从句、现在进行时和过去分词短语作后置定语。二三两句分别挖掘两幅小图的细节词、串连成句,并列结构。第二句描述守门员眼中任务艰巨、无法完成,出现了介词短语放在句首作状语、三次主系表结构、两个从句(比较状语从句、表语从句)。第三句描述在前锋眼中,对手强大、难以战胜。首段先后出现了 “it is symbolically illustrated that", "striker", "shoot at the goal", "defended by a goalkeeper", "mission impossible", "on the contrary", ’giant guard" 等精彩语言。
第二段意义阐释共三句,总分总结构。首句是主题句及全文的中心思想,点出图画的深层象征寓意:面对挑战应该充满自信,使用了两次主系表结构、不定式短语作表语、介词短语放在句首作状语、动名词短语作定语。二三两句进行正反论证,第二句进行让步,使用了介词短语放在句首作状语、宾语从句、现在完成时、主谓倒装、定语从句。第三句进行正面论证和小结,使用了强调句、介词短语作定语和宾语从句。第二段依次运用了 "the purpose of the drawing is to show us that", "in the face of", "challenges and predicament", "self-confidence", "is of utmost significance", "regardless of", "no matter how", "there are bound to be times when", "encounter difficulties and problems", "it is ...that", "critical", "eventually play a crucial role", "turn failure into victory"等精彩表达。
第三段举例论证共四句,总分总结构。首句承上启下进行过渡。二三两句举出海伦·凯勒的例子进行论证,具体生动,使用了过去时和平行排比结构。尾句进行小结,前后呼应,运用了让步状语从句。尾段先后出现了 "illustration", "deaf, dumb and blind", "conquer multiple handicaps", "inspiration", "this case effectively clarify that", "no matter what", "are confronted with", "overestimate", "underestimate" 等精彩语言。
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